This blog comprises an up-to-date collection of all my bits and bobs - both poems and song lyrics. The selections date back as far as 2005. I hope you enjoy them. And, please, do comment!
Wednesday 2 December 2009
Voices (haiku).
Washed out in a sea of echoes, we fire off in loud unison.
Robert, I see you've not been getting comments. Perhaps you'd do better if in your 'ABOUT ME' you could modify, or delete altogether, that fuck you attitude. I agree, you're not a man yet. What, too you, is a man? As far as this haiku goes, think, what do you mean to say and eliminate four syllables. Telling me to fuck myself has no power. Grow slowly into poetry, and into a more peaceful you. Haiku and bad-ass have never worked...old pajamas
Lol. That's a very brilliant breakdown. I'm a caring individual. I guess that's my adolescent guard kicking in. I don't think I'll ever be a man; even when I consider myself to be, I could always be a better man. Where does one's manliness begin and end?
Robert,
ReplyDeleteI see you've not been getting comments. Perhaps you'd do better if in your 'ABOUT ME' you could modify, or delete altogether, that fuck you attitude. I agree, you're not a man yet. What, too you, is a man? As far as this haiku goes, think, what do you mean to say and eliminate four syllables. Telling me to fuck myself has no power. Grow slowly into poetry, and into a more peaceful you. Haiku and bad-ass have never worked...old pajamas
Lol. That's a very brilliant breakdown. I'm a caring individual. I guess that's my adolescent guard kicking in. I don't think I'll ever be a man; even when I consider myself to be, I could always be a better man. Where does one's manliness begin and end?
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